My Final Resting Place Jesse Garratt © 2024
A colleague in the trenches with cold feet curled like a foetus, others bravely peeking out. The ground looks dead. As dead as the men hit by the hail of metal. Screaming shrapnel and death make themselves at home in our ears. Bullets and ‘pills’ run laps around the field. The war continues, as do attendants in the graveyard. Lined up as if marching. A fresh sting of bullets burns like a mosquito sucking the life out of us with its long metal mouth. Lice tremble in our hair. My pain is unimaginable. My pain grows along with the feeling that this woollen overcoat would be my bed forever. The Captain peers over the muddy trench, an ‘egg’ clenched in his fist, he pulls the pin and chucks it out into the battlefield. The enemy fires back. A burning strike to the head, my memories shaken loose. Gone, almost immediately. I have failed my duty and found a forever home. I will miss my friends and family. But I am finally at peace. The pain is gone, and so am I. About the author - Jesse Garratt, age 12, wrote this as short story for an ANZAC Day project to help people understand what war is like. The 'pills' in the story are the bombs being dropped from planes above, and the 'egg' is a grenade.
11 Comments
Veronica Parmiter
2/12/2024 12:33:18 pm
Such a powerful portrayal of the situation faced by many young soldiers - too young to face such a thing. Moving and mature writing from such a young author, well done
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Sue Black
2/12/2024 01:16:02 pm
Such powerful imagery about the tragedy of war. Very impressive writing.
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Brett Hicks-Maitland
2/12/2024 02:15:46 pm
This is very beautiful and moving. Really brilliant imagery, especially for somebody so young.
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Ben G
2/12/2024 04:13:01 pm
Amazing poem Jesse, you captured a moment with vivid emotion.
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Rachel G
2/12/2024 05:35:45 pm
Amazing writing, Jesse! It painted the tragedy of war perfectly. A great reminder to us all.
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Jodi Brady
2/12/2024 07:17:30 pm
Powerful read Jesse, well done!
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David Garratt
2/12/2024 07:57:20 pm
Vivid images, well put together. Excellent work Jesse.
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Nicole Madigan
2/12/2024 09:07:31 pm
Wow! What incredible words anyone, let alone a boy of just 12.
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Yvette Vi
2/12/2024 09:32:38 pm
What an Incredible piece of writing - Absolute chills!
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Sarah
3/12/2024 09:44:11 am
Excellent writing. Well done, Jesse.
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Amanda
3/12/2024 11:33:16 am
Devastating in its detailed depiction of war. Such a powerful poem, especially from someone so young!
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